Poetic Justice! Gloom! Gloom!
As I walked
I stumbled upon
A path most would dare not tread upon.
The trees, barren, skinned
The lights murky and dim
My emotions a shell
Yet now beginning to well.
A slave to dredge on
Feeling nothing but gray
I sensed only darkness
Lonely, my soul flayed.
My body was numbed
By the anchor I carried
An anvil of guilt
Had been keeping me weary
Eating crumbs of despair
Despised, and unaware
That I was robed with aggression
From our failing's ascension.
Alone in the dark
I had only one thing
to keep me going - to stop my tears from flowing.
This box of light
My love and my pining
An imperfect jewel
You send my stars aligning.
It was to you that I wandered
But you had since left
And I'm left to ponder
What am I to do?
Without you I am somber.
I stumbled upon
A path most would dare not tread upon.
The trees, barren, skinned
The lights murky and dim
My emotions a shell
Yet now beginning to well.
A slave to dredge on
Feeling nothing but gray
I sensed only darkness
Lonely, my soul flayed.
My body was numbed
By the anchor I carried
An anvil of guilt
Had been keeping me weary
Eating crumbs of despair
Despised, and unaware
That I was robed with aggression
From our failing's ascension.
Alone in the dark
I had only one thing
to keep me going - to stop my tears from flowing.
This box of light
My love and my pining
An imperfect jewel
You send my stars aligning.
It was to you that I wandered
But you had since left
And I'm left to ponder
What am I to do?
Without you I am somber.
3 Comments:
Needs some serious work, Neddy.
And here, I hope are the improvements.
rhyme scheme is still off the 1st and last stanzas don't fit. I really think you should try not to rhyme or come up with rhymes that work without too much work.
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